雅思作文:開篇就要爭(zhēng)高分
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雅思考生們面對(duì)的都是同一個(gè)寫作題目,但是卻會(huì)寫出不同的結(jié)果。那么究竟什么樣的寫作方式更容易獲取高分呢?這次我們就通過(guò)對(duì)下面這個(gè)例題和幾篇例文的對(duì)比講解來(lái)探討下雅思寫作的開頭方式。題目如下:

Throughout the history, male leaders often made the society more violent and conflicting. If women governed the world, it would be a more peaceful world. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give an example to support your idea.

不同的開篇方式例文,從簡(jiǎn)單到復(fù)雜,從低分到高分。

模式一: 3句式 rephrase the title + quote others' opinions + make one's own point clear

用一個(gè)好的句式 Recently there has been a hot debate in the public over the issue whether the world would be more peace if women governed the world.

用動(dòng)詞變化和連詞連接觀點(diǎn) Some people believe that women would be better governors while other people couldn't agree.

提出自己的觀點(diǎn),如果現(xiàn)在還沒(méi)有明確的觀點(diǎn),可以虛晃一槍 I will analyze the two opinions and then give my own point of view.

模式二: 由于上面一篇文章并沒(méi)有顯示出創(chuàng)造性,所以容易被考官識(shí)破,只能得到5到5.5 分,實(shí)在是模板痕跡太過(guò)明顯,所以可以考慮升級(jí)。

可以從world governor 或者man/ woman作為切入點(diǎn),避免直接談到話題,而是“后退一步”從話題的部分內(nèi)容中切入

It's generally agreed that women are more considerate and patient than men. However, would the world be more peaceful if women were the governor of the world? Personally, I believe that women are better governors than men.

Undoubtedly, women and men should be treated equally. However, when it comes to governing the world, it seems that most of the governors are males just as the word "history" indicates history is "his story", not "her story". In my point of view, women would make better governors if given the chance.

模式三:可以考慮拋開背景知識(shí),采用其他的開篇手法,雖然難度可能更大一點(diǎn)。

At the mere mention of women governing the world, most of us may naturally form an unrealistic picture of a more peaceful world where the sun always shines. The other side of the picture, however, is just to the opposite.

Have you ever considered why the world should be governed by males most of the time? Has it ever occurred to you that women might make more competent leaders and the world would be more peaceful under their leadership? I sincerely believe that women could at least make equally capable leaders as men if not better.

Sometimes while looking back on the trip, one may find that seemingly the road has always been bumpy and muddy and sadly the driver has been a man most of the time. Some people may therefore come to a misunderstanding that it is the man driver who has made the voyage uncomfortable and even miserable. It is the same case when it comes to the human being's history. I sincerely believe that whether the society is more violent and conflicting may not have a close relationship with the gender of the leader.

通常我們不希望學(xué)生以一句話開頭,不方便在第一段過(guò)早提出自己的所有理由,否則會(huì)導(dǎo)致body paragraphs沒(méi)有新觀點(diǎn)引出。當(dāng)然在第一段直接提出觀點(diǎn)也不是不可以的。

例如:

I don't think there will be any possibilities to make such an assumption as to whether the world would be more peaceful if the world were governed by women. However, I believe that women may not make better leaders than men.

希望同學(xué)們仔細(xì)品味這些開頭的區(qū)別與得分的關(guān)聯(lián),從而更好的在自己的寫作中發(fā)揮。

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